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Right Good turns technobabble and waffle into plain English.

And yes, we can even make sense of government Acts and council policy documents!

Here are some examples of our editing:

Editing waffle

ORIGINAL:
Overdue BWOF letters are processed two times every month based on a monthly schedule. Overdue letters about matters that are due in the first half of the month (1st – 15th) are processed separately from overdue letters about matters that are due in the first half of the month (16th – 31st).

EDITED:
Overdue BWOF letters are processed twice a month based on their due date (1st – 15th and 16th – 31st).

ORIGINAL:
As you have seen in this lecture, the central point of reference of the course is the illustrated metaphor of a maze. Within this maze, three levels are to be recognized. Besides the maze metaphor being the core of this course, it will also be an metaphor for your future designs. Therefore, I would like to make sure that you truly understand what this maze metaphor means.

EDITED:
The following questions test your understanding of the metaphor of a maze with three levels.

And this spectacular piece of waffley technobabble:

ORIGINAL:
Electrical work must not be carried out on electrical equipment while energised only because it is merely more convenient for the electrical equipment to stay energised while the work is being carried out. A person conducting a business or undertaking requiring electrical work to be carried out may provide operational reasons appearing to justify energised electrical work. Requiring electrical work to be carried out while the equipment is energised when it could be avoided places an onerous responsibility on the business or undertaking commissioning the work to minimise the risks. Should an incident occur as a result of carrying out energised electrical work, the business or undertaking commissioning the work is at risk of being found not to have provided a safe workplace. Testing and Fault finding is the only task where work is partly performed ‘live’. Specific rules apply for this work. Refer to earlier section “How to perform fault finding and testing after repairs”.

EDITED:
Electrical work must not be carried out on electrical equipment while energised.
Testing and Fault finding can be partly performed ‘live’, and specific rules apply for this work. Refer to the section “HOW to perform fault finding and testing after repairs”.

Visual representation

ORIGINAL:
Collection containers need to be clear in colour. If they are coloured we cannot get enough light into the container to accurately identify the pest. They must have twist or push tops without places for pests to hide. If there are ridges or cavities in the cap we may need to hunt for the pest in the hidden places and this can be very time consuming. They should be between 50-60mm in height. If the containers are too long they may not fit under the microscope. Too small and the label cannot be attached properly and will cover up too much of the vial, thus restricting light from the microscope. They must be clean. If containers are reused there is a chance of cross contamination which may lead to an inaccurate identification. There must be multiple treads in lid. The lid needs to be able to be attached securely.

EDITED:


ORIGINAL:
A copy of this Health & Safety Induction Form should be completed and one copy should be kept in your Training Folder. It is very important you do this. It should be signed by the Trainer before you file it in your folder, and a copy should be photocopied and should be given to HR before you file your copy in your folder.

EDITED: TABLE


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